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Eddie Spinola ([personal profile] acertifieduser) wrote2011-08-19 12:00 am

○ 07: i am right, i swear i'm right.

Here's the new serial:
LITTLE BLACK RAINCLOUD
PART THIRTY-TWO


   Between then and now, Harold grew up convinced that the Red Hot Chili Peppers song “City of Angels” was written for him alone and often sang it at Tuesday night karaoke: “She sees my good deeds and she kisses me windy; lonely as I am, together we cry.” If he knocked back a few drinks in his time at the bar, he would inevitably be taking a cab home in the rain. He always brought an umbrella, just in case. Because his apartment didn't allow pets, he bought a plant once instead. It died two days later, from too much exposure to the sun and heat; the next day, upon his discovery of the mangled, bone dry corpse, it rained to spite him. Harold spent a time convinced of his superiority, believing himself to be akin to Zeus, god of lightning and thunder, or Storm, the X-Man who commanded the weather. Those delusions of grandeur became somewhat muddled when the weather became more of an inconvenience than a benefit, rain storms ruining already terrible days, making him much later to work every day that he overslept his alarm.
   Today was one such day of inconvenience. His misery caused the rain and that water produced resentment and even greater feelings of sadness. Instead of likening himself to Zeus, these days he settled for Eeyore, from Winnie the Pooh, trying to take the whole thing in stride. 'At least Eeyore had better friends,' he thought as he resigned himself to his fate, lowered his briefcase, and began to walk home in the rain.



I hope everyone's alright. There's not a lot that we have here, but we can at least be grateful for our health, right?


[ooc; Eddie is affected. He was raised without the drugs and on a good path. He aspires to be a writer as is too concerned with happiness and optimism to ever care about money and things like that. He's a total pushover and will agree to pretty much any favor (outside of sexual ones), so feel free to have a history of bossing him around. Also, assume his writing is a regular network post that people can choose to look forward to or be totally sick of.]

[identity profile] givemeafight.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 04:29 am (UTC)(link)
I think it's great so far! Just as a note, you might want to try to limit your pop culture references. I don't know who Storm is or what an X-Man is. Just make sure to consider your audience.

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 04:34 am (UTC)(link)
Sorry. I didn't really think about that. I guess I do this to learn things, right? Thanks for the feedback, Emil.

[identity profile] givemeafight.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 04:38 am (UTC)(link)
You're welcome, Eddie. And hey, that's why there's a rough draft and why editors have a job.
paradoxlol: (!mirror: default)

[personal profile] paradoxlol 2011-08-19 04:40 am (UTC)(link)
So this is where bad writers go when they die.

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 04:54 am (UTC)(link)
I really think it's getting better, Arthur. I feel like there's a real sense of imagery here.

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 04:55 am (UTC)(link)
That's true. Although I guess I have to work on that kind of stuff if I want to maybe try to become an editor too.. but, focus on one thing at a time. For the next one, I'll keep my audience in mind and try to limit the references.

How are you doing, man?
paradoxlol: (!mirror: arch)

[personal profile] paradoxlol 2011-08-19 04:56 am (UTC)(link)
There's a real sense of something, alright...

How many English teachers did you drive to suicide?
Edited 2011-08-19 04:56 (UTC)

[identity profile] givemeafight.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 04:57 am (UTC)(link)
I'm doing alright. At least, as alright as you can be on this boat.

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 05:01 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, of course. Is there anything you need?

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 05:03 am (UTC)(link)
You should either give constructive feedback or not give feedback at all, man. There's no reason to be mean about it. [BAWWW. DREAM CRUSHER.]
paradoxlol: (!mirror: default)

[personal profile] paradoxlol 2011-08-19 05:05 am (UTC)(link)
Hey, I hear the world of publishing is pretty harsh. I'm doing you a favor. [ARTHUR: EVERY TROLL ON FF.NET.]

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 05:11 am (UTC)(link)
The only favor you're doing me is helping me to realize what a jerk you are. [A DEVASTATING COMEBACK!]
paradoxlol: (!mirror: smirk)

[personal profile] paradoxlol 2011-08-19 05:14 am (UTC)(link)
Something else you ought'a get used to. The world's full of jerks. [SOB, I LOVE FLOOD EDDIE.]

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 05:20 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, I know.

[...]

But you don't have to be one! You could always make the choice to be a nice guy. It's not easy, sure, but you would feel better about yourself.. and people would like you more. Like a lot more.


[ROFL. I LOVE FLOOD ARTHUR. Also, sorry for icon fail. :| I haz no icon space with him.]
hatestriangles: (mirrorverse: not buying what you sell)

[personal profile] hatestriangles 2011-08-19 07:57 am (UTC)(link)
You know the song's called "Under the Bridge", right man?

[He just... eyerolls at your writing most of the time, Eddie, sorry :c]

[Lol typing I can has.]

[identity profile] expectremorse.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 08:12 am (UTC)(link)

That's not making me particularly excited for the next installment. The last installment was interesting. How come you didn't build on that?
darknessb4me: (mirrorverse - holding out for a hero)

[personal profile] darknessb4me 2011-08-19 08:50 am (UTC)(link)
Is that how you sleep at night, warden?

[identity profile] thebestnose.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 11:14 am (UTC)(link)
Oh yes, just settle for what you have.

<3

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 01:52 pm (UTC)(link)
I did build on it! I had to explain the character's motivations more.

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 01:52 pm (UTC)(link)
It is?

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 01:54 pm (UTC)(link)
It's not settling! I'm still pursuing my dream even here. I just mean that we shouldn't complain too much when bad things happen. 'It could be worse,' as my dad used to say. Or maybe it was a character from a movie; I forget. My point is, we should be grateful for what we have. That's all.

Video

[identity profile] 19centconstable.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 02:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Ed...what'm I gonna do with you.

[Cockney facepalm.]

[identity profile] 19centconstable.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 02:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Oi. You wanna fat lip, Artie?
hatestriangles: (mirrorverse: all these people talking)

[personal profile] hatestriangles 2011-08-19 02:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Yep. I had this friend back home; the Chili Peppers were his thing for a while.

Video

[identity profile] acertifieduser.livejournal.com 2011-08-19 02:27 pm (UTC)(link)
It's good, right?

[SUPER EXCITED PUPPY DOG HOPEFUL GRIN.]

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